John created a campsite scene for his diorama. Here is his work and description.
Campsite
Around the warm
campfire, the shining stars up in the beautiful dark sky were perfectly clear.
People were playing happily but just then the two terrible bad guys killed the
two people that were playing soccer happily. When the bad guy decided to come
in to the tent a shooting star got down and killed the two bad guy. When the
people heard the shooting star they ran out and have a wish but it was two slow
but just he saw his child on the floor he cried sadly he tae his child to the
hospital to see if they can live but then the people in the hospital said they
don’t know but they say to take your child to the church then they said your
child is ok so they shouted happily!
Great work John. You have re-drafted your work well from you first draft. You've got some good vocabulary choices in here. :-P
ReplyDeleteMrs. Elrick
Yeah !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D
ReplyDeleteJOHN
it looks fantastic i like the lego boat from matthew bartonclouthe
ReplyDeletei like playing with your lego boat its the best boat in the world jeremy a
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